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Hi Richard

Hi Richard won't you answer me?
Shaking your head in disbelief.
The engine is running Richard it's time to leave.
I've got some time for some wine; I just need a chance to breath.
Richard don't judge just let me be.
This is your last call Richard are you coming with me?
You see I have a lot of responsibility.
3:30 is coming soon, and I am not me.
Yeah I know I bleed, and I seem to think it's the humidity.
Richard I just need some peace, don't shake your head just answer me, please.

Hi Richard, now your upsetting me.
I've got a little girl with places to be.
The engine is growing hot and I am feeling all of society.
Let's get a bite to eat and talk about you and how I lost me.

Hi Richard, now my body is yellow, and I think it's the color of my past.
We are out of time now, and the hour only makes this minute last.
Richard I am seeing angels, and Mom has got her arms praying like a tree.
Richard I need this wine to bring her back to me.
Richard I am growing impatient, these people need to leave.
Give me this one hour and then we'll clean.
Tell Mom I love her and want so much to believe.
Now Richard God is watching over you and me.
Why won't you answer me?

Hi Richard, now my time has bled out into your apathy.
Richard I am gone, please don't be mad at me.
Bye Richard I can no longer wait when I just need to be.
So far away from here.
Bye now Richard, it's becoming clear.
My eyes are yellow and clairty is fear.
Bye now Richard, you were never here.

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Well done

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it may be a silly question but i dont get the narrator.... is she dead or is she seeing people(Richard). otherwise its a real nice poem/story

soi-disant
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I interpret this as being told by the woman while dying of alcoholism... subconscience like... as if "richard" were reading her thoughts, or interpreting them for himself. This is an empathy well thought out... I also feel the hurt at the end, as...

I interpret this as being told by the woman while dying of alcoholism... subconscience like... as if "richard" were reading her thoughts, or interpreting them for himself. This is an empathy well thought out... I also feel the hurt at the end, as if all "richard" had done, was not enough. Again, well done

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Thank you for the feedback. Yes it is told by the woman as she slips in and out of alcoholic dellusions and believes "Richard" is real, when in fact he is a figment of her imagination.

Jason Czebotar
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Aha! I liked it very much

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