Sat September 4, 2010

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Hello there!!! Although I prefer Bourbon AlainDelondontdrinkcolone AlainDelontakesdoubleBourbon
Joshua Hennen's picture
Nice imagery--savoring the delights of the simple pleasures! I like the "invisible vapor of the ice" line especially. I might recommend replacing the word "savory" with a word like smoky or one similar to it. "Whisky and freedom gang thegither" wrote Robert Burns.
Alberto Arza's picture
What do you think? the thick sultry fluid (connects to a sexual experience) the thick mellow fluid (connects to relaxing at end of day) the thick peated fluid (connects to the process "Scottish vats") the thick aged fluid (connects to wisdom) From Yahoo answers: I find that bourbon has sweet taste, sort of sickly sweet and harsher alcohol flavour.Bourbon is made with new charred wood, and tends to have a charred character. Scotch is mellower, but more flavourfull. Scotch get s nice vanilla/caramel flavour w/o the charred character. Barley doesn't have the sickly sweetnes that the corn imparts to bourbon. Scotch tends to be aged longer in wood, which allows it to mellow more. I prefer a well peated scotch, preferably from Islay. The peating process adds a mellow smokiness and the Islay air adds a salty brine character. In general, I'd say the difference is one of mellow complexity in scotch vs. sweet and rough in bourbon. But everyone's tastes are different...
ugwerks's picture
I greatly appreciate the depth and rigor of your research into spirits. If you need help doing further investigation, I would be happy to throw back a few this evening and report back. Nice verse, BTW
Alberto Arza's picture
Well ug, I am in need of some field research on Kettle One mixed with lemon-lime Amp Energy drink. Of course you may not be reporting back for a couple of days! Thanks for the comment.
ugwerks's picture
I'll let you know how it turns out, post recovery
Eric Lawson's picture
I can relate to this in a major way.
Joshua Hennen's picture
I think "thick mellow fluid" is more in keeping with the thrust of your poem. In addition, the progression of dental-labial-labiodental phonemes is very effective as it keeps the sounds at the front of the mouth alternating between the teeth and lips. So does "thick peated fluid," hoewever, but the word "peated" seems too esoteric here. And I don't know if peatiness portrays relaxation. It's all a matter of style but I think "thick aged fluid" is very inferior: the "ck" sound is formed on the palate with the back of the tounge followed by an expansion in the same area to form the "a" sound. It seems that English likes to settle into a tee-tum, tee-tum, back-and-forth construct.
ah, you can almost smell the peat.
 

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